Friday, December 17, 2010

Revised story

My final project evaluation made me take a step back and examine this project from a distance. I realized what was really important and interesting to me--Studying Otto's character, making his observatory and his rocket, understanding the reason he is an astronomer. I feel like I got caught up in story and forgot about that (and lost out on some needed logic according to some...).

So, I have another take on this project, using the same sets, same puppet, same shots (mostly), but a little more haunting. A twisted fairy tale, if you will. (voiced by a man with a strong Russian accent)

Once upon a time there was a boy who loved a girl (slow zoom in to obsewrvatory)

She was an ordinary girl (zoom in to Otto at his desk)

but he was no ordinary boy (otto writing, observing)

Other children played with marbles,

he collected them. (we see cluttered shelves and land on this marble "collection," displayed as a solar system model

While they milked cows,

he discovered the milky way (we pan across his notes)

They didn't understand him,

and he understood too much (more writing, observing, mannerisms)

And so he spent much of his time alone. (extreme wide shot of the observatory)

The girl didn't understand him either,

But she didn't have to. (Otto packs a picnic basket w bread, jam and prepares his samovar!)

They both understood the moon.

She for its beauty, he for its mystery (otto walks across observatory)

She longed to fly there.

But she knew it was impossible. (otto opens door leading to rocket, begins to go through it)

She died thinking that.

And so he vowed to prove her wrong.

Once upon a time there was a boy who loved a girl

She was an ordinary girl (inside rocket, preparing for take off)

but he was no ordinary boy. (blast off!)

fade out!

1 comment:

  1. I think this is a pretty strong revision. I hope the project is still going.