Project Otto Storyboards: Round 2

I've revised the storyboard so that there is more movement within the shots. I think it's adding a lot of depth to the story!

We move through test tubes...

Over a moon rock...

And crates...

To Otto, who is writing down observations in his journal.

He takes a sip of water

Sets the glass down

And grabs a moon locket on his desk.

Finally removes his eye from the telescope to look at it.

A moment of reminiscence.

We dissolve on a match cut to 10-year-old Otto's hand.

Pannig up, we see Diana under a tree twisting a flower.

Otto gives her the moon locket.

We rotate around the tree...

And see Otto and Diana reading an astronomy book

Panning right we now see Otto and Diana playing with a make believe rocket.

Close on a sign that reads:

We pan up to Diana's face in the "rocket" looking at Otto

And "blast off!"

We pan up with Diana's jump to the starry sky.

And pan back down/zoom out to see Otto and Diana star gazing

Dissolve back to the moon locket

Otto sets it down and starts writing: "It's been 70 years since my parents told me..."

"Diana was sick and went to the moon to get better."

"I have searched for years." (Otto flips through the astronomy book.)

"But this is my last attempt to find her" (Otto crosses Diana's name off the rocket).

And we pan up to the starry sky

(And zoom out/down to Otto star gazing alone)"I'm going to the dark side of the moon."

We dissolve back to Otto signing his name "Otto Albertovich Numerov, 1918"

He sets the pen down.

With effort, Otto gets up from his chair.

Walks across the room

Through a door...

Otto flips switches and pushes buttons inside the rocket.

He pauses for a moment to look at the sign that used to be on his and Diana's play rocket.

And blast off!

We pan down as the rocket goes up...

To a graveyard where Diana's name is engraved.

Storyboards for "Project Otto"

EDIT 11/7: I've added the flashback before and during the journal voice over, but I'm contemplating taking the voice over out... Need input.

We start on a MCU of test tubes bubbling...

...and move through them to a glowing/sparkling rock...

...past that and over stacked crates...

To Otto, who is writing. He grabs his cup and drinks.

Sets it down onto a locket. CLANK

Looks down to see the locket.

Picks it up. A moment of reminiscence. We dissolve to:

10 year old Otto's hand holding the locket (NOTE: It has changed to a moon locket).

He puts it around Diana's neck.

Then we see memories. They read an astronomy book under an oak tree.

They make a play rocket out of a crate

They star gaze. Then we dissolve back to...

Otto looking up at the moon.

He begins to write: it's been 70 years since my parents told me Diana got sick went to the moon to get better."

While he writes we dissolve again to Otto's parents giving him back the moon locket.

"...this is my last attempt to find her" (Otto studies the astronomy book alone under their favorite tree).

And crosses off Diana's name from their rocket.

"I'm headed for the dark side of the moon." (Otto moon gazes alone).

We dissolve back to Otto signing his name."Otto Albertovich Numerov, June 1918"

With effort, Otto gets up and starts walking

Goes through a hatch to his rocket.

Cut to a serene exterior view

And then into the rocket! Otto presses buttons, etc.

And off it goes!

And down the hill we go to a graveyard...

Where Diana's name is engraved.